Thanks for the feedback!
So Darkrai is invading Bikini Bottom?
jk, this is actually a pretty good set up to the story, and it has some mystery, which I like. Can't wait to see the next chapter! :thumbsup:
Thanks! Unfortunately, I didn't see Love That Squid, so I don't know Squilvia's personality, but I'll try.
I have to say, I'm enjoying this a lot so far. Your story seems well planned out, and you're doing a great job of easing into it. I look forward to reading more.
If you give Squilvia a small cameo or something, I'd be tickled pink! (As Squidward seems to not have a big role here.)
Hehe Chapter 2 ahoy!
NEED MOAR STORY
So here's Chapter 2! Unfortunately, this chapter can seem cheesy. Hope you enjoy anyways!
Chapter 2: Tour of the Royal Palace
Two days went by without much incident except Squidward screaming in the night due to nightmares he was having. It was finally Sunday, and SpongeBob was getting ready to get picked up by Mindy so she can give him a grand tour of the royal palace. SpongeBob ate Kelp Cereal and filled Gary's food bowl when he wakes up. He heard a knock on the door. He opened the door to reveal Mindy, who smiled and said, "Hi SpongeBob! Are you ready to go?" "I'm ready, Mindy!" SpongeBob answered. Mindy smiled, motioned him to the carriage and played around saying, "Well then, after you sir." SpongeBob giggled and bowed playfully before entering the carriage. Mindy laughed and entered the carriage. She whipped the seahorses, who started to gallop and the two were off to the royal palace.
When they reached the gates of the large sand castle, Mindy alerted the guards to let them know she brought a special guest. They opened the gate and the two stopped by the main entrance. "My father's at Barnacle Bay to settle a dispute between the mayor and townspeople, so I am home alone for the tour." Mindy opened the huge door, revealing an immense hall with a red grand staircase with bronze railways on each side in the end. A long red carpet with golden serpent designs and golden border led to every door and ended at the staircase. A large portrait of King Neptune was on the opposite wall. The doors ranged in color with the name of each room typed in cursive in the middle. Banners with pictures of Roman Gods, ancestors and legends past were draped along the side walls. A large window on top of the portrait showed a picture of Neptune with his famous trident aimed at evil legendary monsters.
SpongeBob was completely speechless. Never had he seen such a colorful and huge room in his life. Mindy started the tour, "So SpongeBob, as you can see, this is the Grand Hall. It leads to every other room in the palace. The banners along the walls on the side are of Roman Gods such as Jupiter, Mars and Apollo and mythological legends. All SpongeBob could say was, "Wow... This room is bigger than my house." Mindy laughed at SpongeBob's statement. SpongeBob joined in. After calming down, Mindy motioned SpongeBob to the first door on the left. She opened the burgundy door and SpongeBob saw a long dining table with a red tablecloth with gold borderlines. The walls were decorated with standing knight armor and a long, large mural of Neptune similar to the one on the large window in the Grand Hall. "This is the Dining Hall. This is simply where my father and I receive our meals. The table is so long because my father occasionally invites gods and goddesses for private meetings and parties." SpongeBob said, "Cool! What kind of food do you eat here, Mindy?" "We usually eat salads and vegetable meals. My father only requests meat during very special occasions." They left the Dining Hall. Mindy pointed to the chained stone wall on the opposite end of the Dining Hall and said, "That's the room that leads to the Dungeons and the Torture Chamber. Nobody is allowed in there except for the guards and my father." She then pointed at the red grand staircase and continued, "The stairs lead to our private bedrooms. There are a couple guest beds and about six bathrooms. Unfortunately, no regular guests are allowed upstairs. My bedroom is a mess anyways."
SpongeBob followed Mindy to a gray door with the words "DO NOT ENTER" in cursive typed on a sign in the middle. SpongeBob, getting nervous, asked, "Um.. Mindy? Why are we here? I don't think we're allowed to see what's inside." He pointed at the sign on the door. Mindy said, "This is the real reason why I wanted you to come here, SpongeBob. My father's not here, anyways, so he probably won't find out." The room was dark upon entrance. Mindy turned on the lights to reveal an empty room except for a large wooden cabinet in the end. The cabinet was filled with golden scrolls with cursive seals.
Mindy stated, "This is the Room of Fate. Here, you can find out your purpose in life, date of death, and significant other. There's a reason why nobody is allowed here. Knowing your fate is bad because it causes you to take immediate action to fulfill or prevent it. This is where I learned and memorized the names of all the sea creatures. The reason we are here, SpongeBob, is that I've learned on the day you beat Plankton against all odds that you have a gift. I snuck in here late at night to do some research. I checked for your name in the scroll that predicts one's gifts and talents. When I found your name and what your gifts and talents are, that's when I knew you are the one." SpongeBob was confused. "The one? What do you mean?" He asked. Mindy explained, "You are the Pure Spirit! This explains how you survived the trench unscathed, how you survived drying out, and the Goofy Goober song!" SpongeBob was astounded, but still confused. He asked, "I'm a Pure Spirit? What's that?" Mindy explained, "A Pure Spirit is an extremely kind hearted and loving spirit. They are among the purest and happiest in the world. They have the ability to conjure anything that can save the lives of others. When it is activated, you are at your most powerful and can be virtually unstoppable. Rumor has it that if you sacrifice yourself for another or die in battle, only your true love can revive you through affection, such as holding hands, kissing, or a statement of true love, such as saying 'I love you.'"
SpongeBob was amazed and scared. 'I'm a Pure Spirit! How is this possible? There's one more thing.' SpongeBob thought to himself. He then asked, "So who's my true love?" Mindy answered, "Well, normally I wouldn't do this, but it can't hurt with you here." She pulled out a scroll with the seal that reads, "TRUE LOVE" and unrolled it. SpongeBob stared at the contents of the scroll. He looked at the names of every name on the left column that was arranged by last name in alphabetical order and the name of the life partner on the right column. When Mindy reached the letter 'S' on the scroll, she read aloud, "Squabber, Squaffle, Squam, Squamley, Squappy, Squarely, Squarepants, there you are." SpongeBob broke his blank stare and looked at his name printed in gold on the scroll. To both his and Mindy's surprise, there was no other name visible on the right column. "That's strange," Mindy said, "This can't be possible. Every sea creature has a true love." SpongeBob, getting scared, questioned, "What? Does this mean that I have no true love? Am I destined to be single forever?" Mindy, trying to calm him down, said, "No. Even if you stay single, there should still be a name on the right column. Those who stay single either choose to do so or they unfortunately never met their true love. I can't explain this though." Mindy tried to think of theories that could possibly explain this mystery, while SpongeBob thought to himself, sad and worried that he might not have a true love. Mindy sighed to herself and told SpongeBob, "I'm sorry SpongeBob. I'll think about this later. Let's finish the tour." SpongeBob sighed too, and followed Mindy out of the Room of Fate.
The rest of the tour went by quickly and, in SpongeBob's case, quietly. After Mindy ended the tour and dropped SpongeBob back at his pineapple home, SpongeBob was deep in thought. All he could think of that afternoon and night was his true love and his newly discovered gift. "Mindy's right," SpongeBob said to himself, "Fate IS scary. Now I don't know if I have a true love." SpongeBob sighed and went to bed, hoping another day at work can get his mind off what he recently found out.
Chapter 2 FINALLY done. I know. True love is cheesy to put on any story, but I can't think of an alternative with the plot in mind, so I apologize. Also, just a question. Chapter 3 has Plankton and his upcoming and most extreme plan yet. Can you guys help me choose: Should I let Plankton unveil his ENTIRE plan this chapter? Or should I leave the plan a secret and let it play out throughout the story? Either way is fine for me. Just need some feedback. Thanks! :)