Creepypasta: Squid's Visit - Alternate Version

[Sunshine Banjo Face]

Wow this puts the creepy in creepypasta and I mean creepy good and interesting

 

[HarryPotterLives]

This is making the original Squid's Visit look tame. :P

 

[Sunshine Banjo Face]

This is making the original Squid's Visit look tame. :p

Somehow yes, yes it is

 

[E.V.I.L]

This is making the original Squid's Visit look tame. :p

it was never creepy, it was just weird

 

[Vuvuzela Smasher]

it was never creepy, it was just weird

Well it was a little unnerving.

 

[NastyPatty2002]

This is awesome and you're my favorite member ever now :P

 

[GordokTheMad]

This is awesome and you're my favorite member ever now :p

Thank you! While I am a bit silly, I tend to have a twisted side sometimes.

I'm actually writing part 3.

 

[sbl]

I'm actually writing part 3.

THANK YOU THIS STORY IS A AMAZING BWAHHHHHHHH

 

[The Guy With the Computer]

Can't wait for part 3.

 

[GordokTheMad]

Part 3 - Together... Forever...

This is where things get truly disturbing. Squidward walks down the stairway, into the basement. And what he sees is extremely eerie. He is standing inside a room, with a dim ceiling light in the center, along with chains hanging from the ceiling. On the opposite side of the room is a rusty cage. He walks to it, and there’s a crude-looking sentence engraved on the front. The inscription, though scratchy, says “Harry – friends forever!”. He looks inside the cage (it has a barred window) and is horrified to find the remains of someone who was trapped inside the cage, with the interior filled with twisted and distorted drawings and writing on the walls. Squidward is even more horrified when he sees that the name under “Harry” is his own!

Squidward tries to escape as fast as he can, but all the doors are locked. Just as he tries to escape the back door, Spongebob appears behind him, startling him. Spongebob looked psychotic, twitching and trembling as he walked. He had a large unnerving smile on his face, and he was holding a bloody butcher knife.

Squidward: Please! Let me out of here!

Spongebob: Oh, I can’t do that, Squidward! If I let you go, you will tell everything to the police, and nobody wants that. And you can’t escape me! I’ve barred every door, every window, every secret passage so that you have no chance of getting out! But now that you’re stuck here, and once I’m finished with you, we shall be closer together, forever….

Squidward tries to break the door down, but it won’t budge. And Spongebob begins to cackle maniacally as he slowly approaches Squidward, who is now huddling in fear. The camera pans away from Spongebob, but the shadows, depicting Spongebob raising the knife in the air, can be seen. Spongebob then pierces the knife into Squidward, causing a large, graphic amount of blood to splatter on the wall, before suddenly cutting to black, but not without a horrible scream from the poor cephalopod. And the episode ended.

I felt extremely uneasy by the time the episode was over, I was determined to find out its origin.

(THE 4TH AND FINAL PART WILL COME SOON)

 

[SBRoxMan]

Great work, is it weird for me to want to see that as an actual episode? :P

 

[GordokTheMad]

Great work, is it weird for me to want to see that as an actual episode? :p

Probably not, since if that version of Squid's Visit WAS real, I'd probably want to watch it as well, just out of morbid curiousity.

 

[SBManiac!!!!!!]

The rest of this pasta was pretty good, but I was expecting some more build-up to the creepy stuff. Otherwise, the story feels too short and rushed just to get the dark imagery over with.

Also, was I the only one who wanted SB to go full on Jack Torrence mode? :p

 

[GordokTheMad]

The rest of this pasta was pretty good, but I was expecting some more build-up to the creepy stuff. Otherwise, the story feels too short and rushed just to get the dark imagery over with.

Also, was I the only one who wanted SB to go full on Jack Torrence mode? :p

I see what you're saying. This is actually my first time writing a creepypasta, and nobody's first time is perfect, right? If I do write another creepypasta, I'll try to add a little more build-up next time. ^_^ I was trying to be as creepy as other creepypastas, but I at least wanted to try and be somewhat original, as supposed to the violent and gory types where either a character kills him/herself or a character kills everybody else.

Although, if you think about it, the Fridge Horror behind the dark basement, as well as the cage with "Harry - Friends Forever!" on it, is actually pretty disturbing...

And Jack Torrence mode actually would've been a bit interesting!

 

[HarryPotterLives]

"Harry - Friends Forever" ... with my username I can't help feeling a bit nervous. :P

 

[Master WhoBruh]

Excellent part 3. This is 1000000000000000000000000000X better than Squid's Visit.

 

[hfjs]

The picture is creepy enough without the knife.

But great pasta!

 

[The Guy With the Computer]

Part 3 - Together... Forever...

This is where things get truly disturbing. Squidward walks down the stairway, into the basement. And what he sees is extremely eerie. He is standing inside a room, with a dim ceiling light in the center, along with chains hanging from the ceiling. On the opposite side of the room is a rusty cage. He walks to it, and there’s a crude-looking sentence engraved on the front. The inscription, though scratchy, says “Harry – friends forever!”. He looks inside the cage (it has a barred window) and is horrified to find the remains of someone who was trapped inside the cage, with the interior filled with twisted and distorted drawings and writing on the walls. Squidward is even more horrified when he sees that the name under “Harry” is his own!

Squidward tries to escape as fast as he can, but all the doors are locked. Just as he tries to escape the back door, Spongebob appears behind him, startling him. Spongebob looked psychotic, twitching and trembling as he walked. He had a large unnerving smile on his face, and he was holding a bloody butcher knife.

Squidward: Please! Let me out of here!

Spongebob: Oh, I can’t do that, Squidward! If I let you go, you will tell everything to the police, and nobody wants that. And you can’t escape me! I’ve barred every door, every window, every secret passage so that you have no chance of getting out! But now that you’re stuck here, and once I’m finished with you, we shall be closer together, forever….

Squidward tries to break the door down, but it won’t budge. And Spongebob begins to cackle maniacally as he slowly approaches Squidward, who is now huddling in fear. The camera pans away from Spongebob, but the shadows, depicting Spongebob raising the knife in the air, can be seen. Spongebob then pierces the knife into Squidward, causing a large, graphic amount of blood to splatter on the wall, before suddenly cutting to black, but not without a horrible scream from the poor cephalopod. And the episode ended.

I felt extremely uneasy by the time the episode was over, I was determined to find out its origin.

(THE 4TH AND FINAL PART WILL COME SOON)

I wasn't planning on sleeping anyway.

 

[GordokTheMad]

I wasn't planning on sleeping anyway.

Sweet dreams!

 

[Sweat]

Absolutely amazing, man. Keep it up.